Talk:Farzane.bagheri.cause and effect..7 ordibehesht/@comment-8995715-20130501123310

hi dear

i have read your essay. totally you have written a good article. i think that some parts have not met the grammatical rules such as the place of adverb in paraghraph 2. Meanwhile your writing has no clear topic sentence in paraghraph 2 and 3. and some parts are missing coherency.

with best regards,

Toughiry